martes, 22 de enero de 2008

Solduga

Once upon a time there was a little town called Solduga. It was just in a ledge of a craggy cliff of one beautiful mountain in the Catalonian Pyrenees. Solduga was in the mountain range of Boumort, situated in a very high place, and for that reason it had a beautiful view over the extensive valley that was on his feet.
One side of Solduga, the back, was the mountain, just touching the houses. In fact some of those houses had the mountain as one wall. The mountain was of tough stone with some holes that made natural caverns. A wall that made the town accessible only by the sides, and completely protected against everything you could think from the back.
The few families who lived there were very hard workers and their daily tasks made them busy all day. They were concerned with tilling, taking care of theirs cows, lambs, goats and farmyard animals. They were really busy. And day after day their busy lives were going well. No big problems, a peaceful life…
Winter was very hard there because the single road was a track full of snow and usually it had to be cut from the beginning to the end in each cold winter, and obviously nobody went there.
One beautiful day at the end of autumn, everybody was preparing for the winter. They were very busy trying to get a lot of meat when a couple of hunters arrived there. Children were very happy because nobody had been there for a long time and they ran into them, saying hello and asking them many things. But the hunters didn’t answer them. The hunters looked into themselves, and their faces were obscure, gloomy and serious.
Somebody called the children “boys, come back to home! Don’t bother the visitors! Come on!”
Pau, was a curious boy who didn’t take the parents advice: he wanted to play, and he followed the men. But he did it hidden; he didn’t want to have problems with elders.
One of the hunters talked:
· Fred, let me give a glance around here. I will find the best place to put the tent. Meanwhile, would you mind taking water from the fountain we saw at the entry of Solduga?
· Sure. Harry, what about putting the tent in one of those caverns
· That could be a good idea

Pau was so happy! New people to talk with. He was anxious to make contact with them.
Pau followed all movements they did and when they were sitting he leaved his hiding place and said hello to the men.

But the men didn’t answer. They didn’t even look at him. Pau started to feel very strange, very uncomfortable, but he couldn’t stop walking towards them. He thought “what a bad-mannered couple…Why are they acting as if I didn’t exist…”

And when he was just in front of them he realized it: he didn’t exist. Pau was there, yelling in front of the two men trying to touch them to talk to them, to communicate. But there was no way no communication was possible between them, because they didn’t live in the same world. In that moment Pau realized he was dead as everyone in town

Suddenly Fred skipped about when Pau touched him.
· Harry, sad to his partner, I have feeling somebody touching me.
· Fred, please don’t do that to me. I’m feeling too much scared to bear your fear, please.

5 comentarios:

marclar dijo...

Hi, how a good idea to write an uncanny story! It has frightened me at the end. It remembers me the good film: “Los otros”. Bye.

Il-kommentatore dijo...

Nice story and nice pictures. The story has reminded me the film “The sixth sense” or “The Hours”. The place where my father born is similar to Solduga. An old little village, with difficult access, where people emigrated to other places. Nobody wanted to live there because it was a place with no future (no work, water problems, etc…). Nowadays the place has changed a lot. A group of people with very good ideas have restored some of the old houses (in fact, most of them were caves) and they have devoleped a kind of rural tourism business (trips with donkeys, etc…). Last time my father saw the place where he was borned, he could not believe about what he has seeing (hostals, restaurants, etc…). From that moment, he usually says “There´s nothing impossible if you have good ideas”.

lolaenglish dijo...

Hi, I really enjoy with your uncanny story. I've found your text very well done. I'm still thinking about my uncanny story and I haven't any ideas. Bye.

Nuria Vidal dijo...

Beautiful and elaborated description! This is an uncanny story. You take the readers into the narrative and you make them believe the story! Well done!!

-A wall that MADE the town accessible

-The few families WHO lived there were very hard workers

-They WERE concerned (0) with tilling...

-farmyard(0) animals

-AT THE END OF AUTUMN...

-nobody had been there FOR A LONG time

-The hunters looked ((0) OR "VERY MUCH") into themselves,

-boys, come back HOME!

-we saw AT the entry of Solduga?

-Could be a good idea ("THAT'S A GOOD IDEA!" OR "THAT COULD BE A GOOD IDEA!", OR JUST "GOOD IDEA!"

-he LEFT his hiding place

-I have BEEN feeling somebody touching me.

Vidakinesiología dijo...

Wawwwwwwwwwwwwww, I enjoyed this uncanny story!! Congratulation!!!
And poor Pau! :(
Life and death are hard........